ext_74919 ([identity profile] saphicwicca.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] lit_gal 2015-12-18 06:51 pm (UTC)

I like it. It's a good begininning. You have a good grasp of who the players on the team are (little snippets of their various areas/Talents), and you get hints of the Darren/Ben issues, as well as hints of what's to come for Darren. Plus there is the hinting at the tension between Darren and Kavon.

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