ext_7846 ([identity profile] slashpuppy.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] lit_gal 2012-10-23 11:12 pm (UTC)

Re: Dr. Sandburg Visits Cascade 4

Hi lit-gal,

Thanks for *yet another* evil-cliffie-of-dooooom! :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Wee fixes:
- like they didn't have a right to sit by the bed of the man who got himself nearly killed saving you [like you didn't]
- Reynolds awkward touched Blair's arm [awkwardly]
- It's bad on our blood pressure. [bad for our]
- Reynolds caught his arm in a firmer grip [firm]
- Okay, so the something he was doing was stupid, but still…. [still...] no period needed
- he conjured the image the Jim lying on concrete steps... bleeding… dying [image of Jim]
- "At least he didn't get kidnapped on my watch." Colonel Reynolds answered in an equally dry tone. [watch," Colonel]
- "Frasier, do you want to…." [to...]
- before he glanced over at O'Neill [she]
- Distantly, Blair heard Janet yell for something, O'Neill demand to know what happened. [something as] and [demanded to know what had]

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